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Tuesday, September 1, 2015

The stupid man

He tied his boat off and started to climb the cliffs. He knew that no one had lived to tell what was behind the cloud , But he still climbed. He was dripping with blood and sweat and heaps of scratches and scars.
Then he got in the cloud ,then he saw a diamond city, but will he was walking there was a big hole but he didn't see it so he fell in it and he was never seen again. That's how he got his name the stupid man.


2 comments:

  1. Great effort Nick, I like the way you showed grit and kept working hard fixing your mistakes. Do you find it helpful getting the computer to read the story to you when fixing your mistakes?

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